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25 Oct 2009 — Hula hoop

How would you improve this sentence?

Michelle Obama demonstrating her hula hooping skills on the White House lawn.

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Add a verb. Change demonstrating to was demonstrating.

Michelle Obama was demonstrating her hula hooping skills on the White House lawn.

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Change demonstrating her hula hooping skills to a modifying clause.

Michelle Obama, [who was] demonstrating her hula hooping skills, promoted healthy activities on the White House lawn.

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Change demonstrating her hula hooping skills on the White House lawn to a modifying clause.

Michelle Obama, [who was] demonstrating her hula hooping skills on the White House lawn, promoted healthy activities.

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